One of the most difficult things for me to remember when I am writing, is to show the passage of time.
As I work at my computer, the stories flow continuously, so I often need to go back as I edit and insert time “markers” for readers. (This is especially important because most people read a chapter or so at a time. They need reminders as to where they are on the story’s timeline).
So, just how do authors deal with the passage of time in their books?
Well, some authors actually date their chapters, such as “Monday. 9 A.M.”
Some label them by the year: 1942.
Some by the season: Summer, 1950.
Still others use the age of the main character: Eighteen.
However, most often authors simply use phrases (usually in the first paragraph of a chapter or scene) which denote passage of time.
Later that morning, the next day, or the following day.
She glanced at the bedside clock. Was it already seven?
The sun dipped behind the mountains.
He had just enough time to shower and dress before his eight-thirty meeting.
She rushed into the baby’s room. Had he really slept through the night?
You get the point: avoid reader confusion by showing the passage of time where necessary.
Do it subtly. Do it creatively. Use a variety of techniques.